Lemon Juice
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| Author | Loquacious369 |
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| Tags | author:loquacious369 flowy fun playable race rated |
| Created | 2009-04-23 |
| Last Modified | 2009-04-23 |
| Rating |
3 by 12 people.
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| Description | Uhh probably my best race I have made... Have fun and plz rate!!! |
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2009-04-24
my first
yeah this is my first
2009-04-24
not bad...
is this your first?? 3/5
2009-04-24
hey thx
thx for the advice and plz look at my demo.
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2009-04-24
omg...
this is a masterpiece... 2 me at least
2009-04-24
:/
Not bad, but had some flaws. Here's some constructive criticism:
Object placement
• Don't hide mines under gold!
• The rockets could have been used better, and there were too many. Most didn't really threaten you, and one was a bit buggy and killed you even when you did it fast (see demo). Try to keep enemies 1) threatening/exiting, 2) to a minimum and 3) devoid of bugs.
Flow
• Loopy. Loops are ok, but get dull if its all you do for 1200 frames! Try to mix it up a bit by adding different elements, some big open areas with large jumps in, perp jumps, chimney jumps, bounce blocks, etc.
• Felt a bit uneven in places, play test it lots, and perhaps ask others to play test it too to point out dodgy spots if you're unsure.
Aesthetics
• Try to go for gold in clumps where there are tricky jumps to pull off, don't just make a dotted line where the flow is!
• The tiles could be more interesting - at the moment it just looks like an obviously linear loopy race. Try to disguise it a bit more and theme it.
Hope some of that helps :)
Object placement
• Don't hide mines under gold!
• The rockets could have been used better, and there were too many. Most didn't really threaten you, and one was a bit buggy and killed you even when you did it fast (see demo). Try to keep enemies 1) threatening/exiting, 2) to a minimum and 3) devoid of bugs.
Flow
• Loopy. Loops are ok, but get dull if its all you do for 1200 frames! Try to mix it up a bit by adding different elements, some big open areas with large jumps in, perp jumps, chimney jumps, bounce blocks, etc.
• Felt a bit uneven in places, play test it lots, and perhaps ask others to play test it too to point out dodgy spots if you're unsure.
Aesthetics
• Try to go for gold in clumps where there are tricky jumps to pull off, don't just make a dotted line where the flow is!
• The tiles could be more interesting - at the moment it just looks like an obviously linear loopy race. Try to disguise it a bit more and theme it.
Hope some of that helps :)
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2009-04-23
Thanks
Thanks for the rating!
2009-04-23
Great job!!!
few things....
1) the gold/mine combo doesnt work with the flow, you have to exit the flow to even get them...thats not good in a race.
2) usually launch pads are not used in races...try takng them out and editing so the jumps are possible
3) the ending is too annoying.....the little curvy circle then squeezing through the tight doors....edit that somehow..
4) overall, nice! liked the flow, 5/5
AGD except the beginnig mine gold and one other piece:
and for those that cant find the "flow" =D
1) the gold/mine combo doesnt work with the flow, you have to exit the flow to even get them...thats not good in a race.
2) usually launch pads are not used in races...try takng them out and editing so the jumps are possible
3) the ending is too annoying.....the little curvy circle then squeezing through the tight doors....edit that somehow..
4) overall, nice! liked the flow, 5/5
AGD except the beginnig mine gold and one other piece:
and for those that cant find the "flow" =D
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Jeremoon
very nice
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